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It all started at a wedding reception, I was standing in the hall talking to Old Greg when someone entered. I don’t know but for some reason she caught my attention; she walked in silently and with uncertainty. Some other people looked round to see who had entered but quickly continued on with there conversations. She must have been at least 18 to 21; she was wearing a snowflake white dress that went all the way down to the floor, strips of fabric flowing off it like a cascading waterfall. Her face had no make-up or lipstick on it, and she had large emerald green eyes, which exuded a shy but also kind personality.  She also had a cute button nose and a, well I wouldn’t say pale but more a light complexion. Her hair was long and black tinged with a dark blue; it also had small silver clips in it that made it look like the night sky. She was of an average height, not much shorter then me, and not extremely thin but heading that way. She didn’t stick out too much, except for an unusually large pendent hanging round her neck. She walked across the hall to the newly weds and congratulated them, her voice was hard to hear from across the hall as it was very soft; it had a element of hope and happiness but at the same time seemed like she didn’t want to talk much. She looked more confident talking to the newly weds rather then standing in the centre of the hall. I began to wonder who she was and how she knew the host. Hmmmm I wonder if she will…? “Ahhh I see you have noticed Kuiki Sakura.” Said old Greg hobbling into my line of sight. Old Greg was wearing a tuxedo and hobbling around on his oak wood walking stick, he had a large bald patch in the centre of his ruff white hair and was hunching over making him ¾ my size.
“You know her? Does she go to the Uni? I’m pretty sure I’ve seen her on campus before.” I replied.
“Yes, she does go to the uni. Hay I’ll tell you a secret.”
“Ummmm ok, but only if it’s not over exaggerated like your stories.”
“Ha, my stories are not that exaggerated; well maybe thy are a little, but…”
“Just get on with the story”
“Oh, sure, well she is a lady.”
“That obvious.”
“Not just that sort of lady, I mean she is lady Kuiki. Also she lives by herself.”
“What are you insinuating?”
“Nothing, nothing. Just she has no mother or father they passed away in a tragic accident. So her grandparents look after her.” I didn’t have anything to say to this I kind of just looked at the floor and felt sorry. “But she inherited a fortune, in fact millions”
“That’s all you think of isn’t it?”
“Hay Kuiki!” Old Greg Yelled across the hall
“Ah, no don’t call her”
“Why not? Are you scared?” Old Greg said grinning at me. Kuiki was walking over her hair trailing behind her. “Hia Greg.” She greeted her hands firmly behind her back.
“Hi Kuiki I want you to meet a good friend here.” He said gesturing towards me.
“Uh, Hi I’m Sean, nice to meet you.” I spluttered extending my hand.
“Hi I’m Kuiki, nice to meet you to.” She replied not shaking my hand but keeping her hands firmly behind her back.  Old Greg tried to get a conversation started by the only way he knows how, story telling. Eventual we got talking or rather I got talking Kuiki remained silent most of the time, only speaking when I asked direct questions. I could tell she was used to talking to completely new people and preferred to be around close friends who knew her better. After 10 minutes, and all the host was sure all the guests had arrived, the newly weds made there speech and cut the cake. There where then other activities going on around the hall, part of it being a dance floor. Of course no matter how hard Greg or I tried Kuiki wouldn’t go near it.
Later Old Greg took me over to the punch bowl, well that was a guise, and told me “What I told you earlier. Don’t tell anyone and do not mention it to Kuiki, OKAY?”
“You have my word.”
“Good now lets be getting some punch back to the others.” As I walked back I couldn’t help thinking about Kuiki little did I know what was waiting outside, bearing it gruesome white fangs.
The next day at the Uni I see Kuiki sitting on a bench under a large oak tree. It was autumn so all the leaves were golden and floating on the wind. This only added to Kuiki, who seemed to be reading. I thought of going up and saying hi but couldn’t think of what to say after. The pond behind the oak tree reflected light up under the tree making the leaves sparkle. I took one step closer and then another and before I knew it I was standing at the bench. Kuiki kept on reading. She was dressed a little less formal then last night she was wearing a sky blue skirt with a horizontal stripe along the bottom, stockings and a blossom white blouse. Over the top of the blouse she was wearing a night blue jacket and a red scarf. She looked up and stared at me as if to say, what are you doing? I hastily sat down next to her and stuttered “Hello again. What are you reading there?” She paused a while before talking.
“Just some revision notes”
“Oh, are they interesting?” Huh what, damn I’m stupid. They’re revision notes of course they’re not interesting. Kuiki looked at her notes then back at me, I felt awkward I had to ask another question that eclipse the other. “So, do you have a test coming up?” Not bad it should make her forget the previous question. “Ummm, no.”
“Really? Then why are you reading study notes?” She shrugged looking back at her notes and then to me. Okay this was getting really awkward. “Well I have to be going somewhere, a… um test, yeah a test. So I’ll see you latter.” I said hesitantly, and got up. She just looked at me and started reading again. Sigh, there’s no way I’ll ever get her to notice me.
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Lol this one started off as an English task to but this time I didn't get carried away. Plus I'm not going to continue this one unless enough people comment and fav it. :la:

Edit: Okay I have put a new version up because I didn't exactly like the previous ending.

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:iconigellkott:
damn seen. this is good, i certainly enjoyed it.
was this for practising the creative writing? keep writing it damn you. it would be a waste to leave it... but no pressure lol. it has a good style.

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The only thing necessary for the triumph of evil, is for good men to do nothing- Edmund Bourke
:iconzenith44:
Thx I might put up a new version soon, I made some changes to the last part.

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:iconsakuraharuno1237:
Hey could u continue this? theres nothing else to read...

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:iconzenith44:
sure I am writing another one too, so when i get time i'll see what i can do

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>>My dragon: [link]
:iconzenith44:
Oh and yes it was practice, The aim of it is to help make characters^^ Imight write a few more lol^^

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:iconigellkott:
another thing. should it be "its white gruesome fangs?"

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The only thing necessary for the triumph of evil, is for good men to do nothing- Edmund Bourke
:iconzenith44:
Oh' alright I'll fix that.
What did you think? Is it as good as the last ending?
lol I'm actually writing more now^^

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>>My dragon: [link]
:iconigellkott:
i did like the other ending.. i guess it left a better.. end? lol

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The only thing necessary for the triumph of evil, is for good men to do nothing- Edmund Bourke
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The flower evokes the girl's white dress, entering the room, is the flower that stands out from all others. Nice description. I really liked.
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